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Help with poem? Topic: How to write a poem for your mom
July 16, 2019 / By Ashley
Question: I'm 14, and I write many storys and poetry. Well, I need to know how to get better on my poetry. Can you help me, and tell me anything that's wrong with this one I wrote below. I don't know if it's good, that's why I'm trying to get better. Please, and thank you! Perfumed Death By: Courtney Evelyn Clark The Crows circle around in the sky. Death is very near. I wait for shedding tears in my eyes, Eternal sleep, I can clearly hear, I smell the good-byes, As I feel fear, Of what is to come. I notice the roses, On my school grounds. They look bright and pretty, But makes me frown. Roses…… The ill-scent. The crows flying. My hearing content. My mom dieing.
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Valorie Valorie | 10 days ago
Fascinating, dark, tragic, and very emotional. Well done. Getting better is spending time in the creative state, and working at making pictures of words that fit together in a nicely artistic way takes practice. You have a wonderful innate talent that with practice will reward you well. Don't quit. You have great promise. I use to write poetry myself, and I kept it all for a long time. In '96 I drove off into a washed out creek during a flood, and all of them washed away because I had them in my car. Make copies of all of your originals and put them away where you can't lose them. Also, if you reach a point in a poem where you just can't seem to come up with the next line, don't throw it away, put it with your other works, and one day you will pull it out, and what you were looking for will just hit you and you will finish it. I have written a seven page poem in two and a half hours, and I have spent two years writing a single page poem. There is no such thing as wasted effort, unless you waste it by throwing it away. Sometimes things will just flow, other times you just have to put things away and let it cook for some more time. One other thing, always keep a pen and tablet with you. You never know when you will have a great idea, and if you don't write it down, you will lose it. I don't know how many things I wrote that were ideas that I had to pull my car over or something and start writing right now, or lose a great poem. Never go anywhere without something to write with, and write on.
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Valorie Originally Answered: I have to memorize a poem by tomorrow. Can you help me? How would you go about memorizing a poem?
It's not really big and it rhymes, so it won't be really difficult:) 1) Read it carefully a couple of times to get the feeling and completely understand it. 2) It helps to read out lout, because you listen to your voice and your brain get stimulated in many ways 3) Learn the first line, then add the second one, the third one etc. 4) It is helpful for some people to write a couple of times something in order to learn it by heart 5) Try to visualize what you are reading ( my brother does that and he is dyslexic, but it helps me to) 6) You could try act it our in a ridiculously dramatic way or in a funny way( sensual voice, foreign accent whatever) to make it less boring BUT if you have to perform it somewhere you should avoid the last "tip". You ' ll have to first memorize it and then add feeling ( in a proper way) Good lack! I am sure you'll make it!

Selah Selah
That’s pretty good. Free verse is becoming increasingly popular these days, where you don’t need to rhyme or have the same number of syllables in each line, but I still love to hear a little meter in poems. While it isn’t necessary, you could make a few changes to get a nice meter going in some lines. For example, you wrote, “The Crows circle around in the sky.” If you changed ‘around’ to ‘round’ I think it would sound nicer. “The crows circle round in the sky.” “I wait for shedding tears in my eyes,” sounds a little off to me, because shedding is the act of getting rid of something, but you wouldn’t wait for getting rid of tears to come to your eyes. Maybe something like, “I wait for my eyes to shed tears” would be better? The next line, “Eternal sleep, I can clearly hear,” I think would sound better if you took the ‘can’ out. That would still give you some inverted word order, but that’s sort of acceptable in poetry. “Of what is to come,” might sound more definitive as “of what will come” “I notice the roses, On my school grounds,” and the next two lines somehow seem to intrude. I think something a little more passive-sounding would be smoother. “Roses on the school grounds Though looking bright and pretty Bring only grief and sorrow” or…something. I don’t know. For your last line, I think “mother” would sound more formal than “mom.” Also, the word is “dying,” not “dieing.” :Revised: The crows circle round in the sky. Death is very near. I wait for my eyes to shed tears. Eternal sleep, I hear. I smell the good-byes, as I feel the fear, Of what will come. Roses on the school grounds, Though looking bright and pretty Bring only grief and sorrow” Roses…… The ill-scent. The crows flying. My hearing content. My mother dying. Please keep in mind that these are only suggestions based on my poetic experience and preferences. I’m not intending to flame your poem or anything, just touch it up a bit. You have all final decisions.
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Oda Oda
Try not to rhyme, a. Soften the way things roll off the tongue unless you want it to come out harsh. For example: They look bright and pretty, but makes me frown. So bright and pretty; they make me frown. And read more than you write. Read more of what you prefer to write. Read things and authors you know you'll hate. And live before you write about it. It you don't know what you're talking about, everything will know it. Only write 'you,' even if it's boring. And never stop learning. And never take advice from someone else about a piece you're happy with.
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Madelyn Madelyn
Her soul sent flying Into heaven and above As beautiful and peaceful as the calmest dove She left me in serenity a beauty that many and few can see She will be missed You could add that to the end of it.
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Kenna Kenna
I'm 15, and I'm not much of a poet myself, but I feel that maybe you should definitely improve on that last stanza. Instead of just stating "my mom dying," try using metaphors.
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Kenna Originally Answered: Is a lyric poem the same as lyrics in music? how do you make a lyric poem?
Poetry is basically music. Songs that have alot of rhyming words is a lyric poem. A song can express your feelings like poetry. A song is a poetry. Lyric poem is the same as lyrics in music. It's easy to make a lyric poem just some lyrics that express your feelings or write lyrics that rhyme.

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