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How would I go about making a scene change in my short story?

How would I go about making a scene change in my short story? Topic: Details in writing activity
July 17, 2019 / By Bennet
Question: I am writing a short story, so I obviously cannot create chapters, nor do I want to. But at one point in the story, I want to skip to four hours later. But I do not want to just start a new paragraph that says, "Four hours later, blah blah blah." How could I go about creating a scene change? I should give you a bit more detail. What happens in the story, is somebody passes out, and then they wake up four hours later. But the reader does not know how long it has been until the character finds a clock that says 2 am. It's kind of supposed to be shocking. So it goes from him driving in his car, to him waking up in the rain. Could I just put, like, a line break or something and then start with, "A drop of rain on his eyelid woke him up." ?
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Abia Abia | 9 days ago
You could use what editors call 'white space', a couple of blank lines where the scene change happens. Or you could put in a short paragraph mentioning that some activity happens that takes four hours, even if the activity is just waiting around. It's hard to say without seeing the whole thing.
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Abia Originally Answered: I need help writing a short acting scene..?
Just sit down, and think about how people feel, how people really talk. Does he spit it all out at once? Does he say it a little at a time? Does she care what he has to say at first, or does she drag it out of him? Another thing to remember is that she isn't the bad guy - if she's just playing the villain, she's going to be a flat character. She has to feel truly justified in what she's doing, too. The easiest way to get a grasp on this is to get a couple of actors together and ask them to improv for you from a few different angles so you can see what you like and what you don't.
Abia Originally Answered: I need help writing a short acting scene..?
It's fine up to the point she threatens to leave him if he turns himself in. The conversation takes a turn when he tells her (and the audience) that he was driving her car. It is possible that there is another way; she could say she will turn herself in, saying she did the deed and panicked at the hit and run scene. In exchange there could be a soul to soul discussion about the relationship and his drinking. He might promise to go into rehab or...? Or she could call her attorney (and play "what if") and her responses in the phone conversation could play out the whole scene, showing what might happen in court, how the jury might treat a woman who panicked and left the scene...etc. After the phone conversation she drives the real bargain at home when she "cuts him the deal" that will change his power status in the relationship, but save their reputation.

Shulamite Shulamite
Does it have to be four hours later? Perhaps add something like "The sun had set by the time she returned to the kitchen" or "Having changed into a suit and tie, he approached the detective". Typically, you wouldn't change scenes in the middle of a paragraph, unless the paragraph is someone telling a story (and even then it might be a bit too long). You'd be fine with just saying "Later, ..." rather than specifying a certain length of time.
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Phemie Phemie
Whenever I use a scene change, I use either white space or I "enter" a line, include an asterix, and then "enter" another line. Voila, instant new scene! Just don't mix the two, then it gets confusing. Hope this helps!
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Phemie Originally Answered: Short story help. 10 pts?
ok, so my brain went crazy with ideas when i read your plight. Here's one i think is pretty twisted. The story should center around one particular student who is constantly feeding the fire against this teacher. he stirs the pot and convinces all the students to hate this teacher. he is rude to her in class, disruptive, gets yelled at. FInally, one day the teacher has had enough, and pulls him out of class into the hallway to talk to him. After about 10 minutes, the other students begin to worry and one student goes out to see if they are still there. The student finds the teacher kissing this young boy (or for an extra twist, girl).

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